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[166853] Artist: Seijimon | Title: tryout2 | Time: 1h 49m
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Seijimon Sunday, December 18th 2011, 11:12 AM
Aiiighhtt heres my 2nd tryout well the only one that didn't particularly annoy me after I drew it... you can see the ones i scrapped if you click on my name.
i just realized this looks ALOT like the borrower arrietty e.e

comfortcoat Sunday, December 18th 2011, 6:28 PM
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ahmm I'm gonna have to say third, because over all your composition is rather...undefined? the face is strong and defined but then when you get to the body there doesn't really look like there's bones underneath all that skin--if that makes sense. He seems to be made out of really vague shapes, nothing has any sort of weight to it, like the pants. There's no pulling for his leg that's propped up, and no flattening of the leg that's on the floor.

The colors are also very light, which is okay, but there's no real contrast among them. The shadows look like they're just a slightly darker hue of the base color instead of a completely different one contrast with it better? They also need to be a lot darker.

Over all the picture just doesn't feel like a finished piece to me, but looking at your other stuff I really think you're capable of doing better.

This other picture you were working on feels much more solid and significant to me: http://sroekaki.net/oekaki/pictures/90314.png

lamb Sunday, December 18th 2011, 9:42 PM
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AAH THIS IS REALLY LOVELY aah aaaah oh gosh

um yeah i'm going to say third too, you're almost there you just need to bring the picture together a little better

but good luck!! you can do it!!

Ailaik Monday, December 19th 2011, 12:14 PM
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you've got a really cute style, but I'd so much love to see something a bit more.. defined
sure it's a watercolor-painty style, but even with watercolor you can work without color bleeds and with proper shading
I vote third as well.. so please, give it your all, because you definately have skills
good luck!


[166786] Artist: Seijimon | Title: tryout#1 | Time: 2h 6m
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Seijimon Saturday, November 26th 2011, 6:30 AM
the one thing i love bout trying out her is that i always come up with new ideas!
also, i forgot how much i loved green, lotsa fun

i guess this is my 1st tryout since i nvr ended up doing a third.

Prince Abooboo Saturday, November 26th 2011, 6:52 AM
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Honestly I don't know why anyone ever said third, because your first was so awesome and the second was intermediate at the least.

ANYWAYS. I like this soooooo much. It's really freaking adorable. The only thing i would say to do differently next time is color more inside the lines (which isn't even really a critique because I like the use of coloring in this) and make a more, I guess, detailed background? I personally don't care about the background because I think this fits the picture, but for future reference. Like I said on nas's tryout, the background rules here are very vague :0

Seijimon Saturday, November 26th 2011, 7:19 AM
thank youuuuu, im pretty impatient for crits! so thanks for commenting so early :]!
I didn't really think my last tryouts were all that bad either but y'know, its all up to u guys, nothing i can do about it xP
And Yes, definitely gonna spend more time tidying up my 2nd tryout, this is pretty messy i must admit xD

Prince Abooboo Saturday, November 26th 2011, 7:23 AM
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It's still really cute! The messy seems sort of intentional, and not lazy though... OR AT LEAST THAT'S HOW I SEE IT. Like when things I draw are messy, it's because I'm being lazy. And you can tell. Here it seems like it was on purpose. ALTHOUGH, WHO KNOWS. I could be completely wrong and you may have just not wanted to deal with coloring.

Anywhosit, good luck! I would love to see more of your art on this board!

imbreum Saturday, November 26th 2011, 11:07 PM
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for your next tryout, i'd recommend you do something cleaner. just, tryouts are supposed to be to the best of your ability, and i don't think this really compares to your last time's attempts. something more detailed with SUPER INTENSE SHADING and crap, cuz that seems to be the universal idea of super tryout. i really enjoy the colors in this one, and the dude kind of reminds me of dragon ball z for some reason. for a minute i thought he was in frosting, but I SEE HE IS IN A FLOWER with a really tiny snake? AND I LIKE IT A LOT I just don't really think it's very tryout-y? yeah sorry my crits suck, especially cuz i like this kind of art more than the detailed intense kind usually, but ANYWAY GOOD LUCK i'm shutting up YEAH

Seijimon Sunday, November 27th 2011, 3:37 AM
well the snake can be tiny or huge, kinda like jake from adventuretime i suppose... ya ive been kinda in a messy oekaki faze, but ill try clean it up for #2. thx for the crits yo!


[166058] Artist: Seijimon | Title: "teh puzzle piece" TRYOUT#2 | Time: 5h 37m
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Seijimon Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 1:15 AM
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I had alot of fun coloring and experimenting with this,
airbrush is now one of my favorite tools.

jillian Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 1:41 AM
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I like that you played around with the proportions, except I feel like they arent really working here. The left arm, especially, if you were to continue drawing in the rest of it it would be insanely long and awkward. I feel like this isnt quite finished yet? The hair looks completely undetailed, and even though I realize its a stylistic choice, the visiblethroughthehair eyebrows are throwing me haha.
Your linework in general is actually nice, I just feel like you could have benefited from fixing some mistakes in the sketch-phase of your drawing. His coat makes his body look a little misshapen, and in general things look very very flat. Which isnt always a bad thing, but here doesnt seem to work very well.

Also something I see that happens a lot is that people add little details like you did to the shading under his arm and the point of the little thing over there but you didnt tie that technique in anywhere else, so it looks really out of place, and doesnt make much sense.
Also keep an eye out for when your lines overlap like his teeth do and some of the shirt lines get onto his hand (this, again, isnt always a bad thing, but when your lines are so smooth and clean, a few mistakes just look lazy and misplaced).

I think you could benefit a lot from some general art tutorials (like shading and color theory etc) You neglected cast shadows completely here, and they really would have improved your picture a LOT.

I always feel awkward voting but Im honestly going to say out, but I think you could easily improve a lot.

Seijimon Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 2:22 AM
aw bummer thx for crits though

Gyarados Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 10:58 AM
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third!! lacking loads of stuff as jillian has mentioned but you do have potential.

lamb Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 3:49 PM
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third

t-rexcellent Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 6:03 PM
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third

Worm Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 7:03 PM
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Agreeing with Julian but I vote third because I think with a little more attention to detail like your first image you are certainly intermediate

Fungasm Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 7:12 PM
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good coloring and clean lineart does not a good picture make. Others said it already. The proportions and construction could be way better. Hope you can show that in your third one <:

Seijimon Wednesday, July 20th 2011, 3:22 AM
Alright, the issues with my picture are pretty clear to me now, i think I may have known them from the start, just thought I could get away with them. ;p
I had a third picture lined up but I think I might start from scratch, try to improve a little before posting here again.
What exactly is the time limit between tryout pictures??

fpppt Wednesday, July 20th 2011, 4:08 AM
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i realy like the way you draw and the only thing i dont really like about this picture is the background, feel like u could have activated the space more but i mean its your drawing so you can do whatevr you want to the backgroudn amirite

and i like the weird proportions i mean it does look awkward but i guess i like awkward things

Seijimon Wednesday, July 20th 2011, 1:11 PM
aw thx :] its good to know someone liked my style! He's definitely supposed to be a creepy,awkward type of guy.


[166044] Artist: Seijimon | Title: tryout1 | Time: 6h 44m
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Seijimon Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 4:30 AM
all done! i think smiley
HI! im Seijimon call me Seiji or Sage if u want.
at bulbakaki im drrr! so shout out if u draw there too!
im not very good at beaks or coloring so i winged it and i think it turned out alright
ummmmmm plz be gentle? |D
nah jk, tear me apart (crits r cool)

Worm Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 4:39 AM
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I'll be honest, the beak kind of scares me in the sense that it looks like the boy's foot is cracked right on through it, I think he was intended to be standing on it? xD

But aside from that, I really like this, I love the blocky geometric style you've got going on here and love all the details and the character designs

imbreum Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 5:48 AM
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your dude looks like my OC miles when i forget to draw his tail.
but yeah, this is cool. i'm digging those red tips at the ends of the feathers, and not-miles' nose. but i don't dig not-miles' saggy butt and his magical vanishing foot. also that one line in the background. on the right, in the tree. there's a shadow from one branch that goes in front of a bright spot on another branch. and it's bothering me. but i like this and it's fun and i wish you good luck!

Seijimon Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 6:25 AM
@ worm oh man poor bird! haha ya he's supposed to be stepping on it, not destroying it ;p
@ imbreum: not-miles is quite offended! Nah i c what ur saying. I want to put that foot in front of that beak hump so bad! btw, theres an even more annoying line on its neck >.>

But seriously thx for crits and nice comments guys

Takio Lamary Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 6:29 AM
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I'll be gentle...real gentle...Oh yea.



Anyway, from an overall standpoint I really like your style, its so clean and fresh. To be honest I actually don't see much wrong in the way of anatomy and what-not except for that foot going through the beak thing. I really do like your style and would love to see you as a member.

Seijimon Tuesday, July 12th 2011, 6:48 AM
ahhh thankyou! 'and id love to be a member here, the fact that this picture didn't thumbnail makes me so happy ._.

apraxia Wednesday, July 13th 2011, 4:36 AM
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a burrowing snagret! i will poison u with my white pikmin kachoo kachoo

Seijimon Wednesday, July 13th 2011, 7:30 AM
homg! haha xD

walter reed Wednesday, July 13th 2011, 7:23 PM
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whoa look at how dramatic this is really neat!! very interesting bird creature

the guy's legs are confusing me just a bit, his left leg looks like his butt is coming out from under his coat, but his right leg is up a lot higher, and with the angle of his right thigh, his leg would be coming out of his stomach, rather than the hip
as for the bird, the feathers look more like scales than they do feathers..and are those feather coming off of its beak??? ....or are they crystals or something that the bird generates off its body and they guy is going there to kill the bird and steal them!!

overall this is nice good luck on your next tryout!!! also i draw on bulbakaki and i think my name is soro or roso on there IDR i haven't drawn there for a while...


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