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[166106] Artist: Darkfire | Title: tryout 2 | Time: 2h 10m
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Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 11:08 PM
my second tryout, gawds those stars took forever to draw, i had alotta fun drawing this though
hmm, isn't this the tryout were you tell me if i'm in or not, or third???

i appriciate any critiques or redlines :3 smiley

(Edited on July 18, 2011, 11:18 pm)

(Edited on July 18, 2011, 11:19 pm)

~MagicalPyroDragon~ Monday, July 18th 2011, 11:14 PM
if you make this public I can redline it for you :o

Seijimon Monday, July 18th 2011, 11:18 PM
woahh that dragons face and muscular structure are pretty boss,
i dig the background as well, so calming :] GoodLuck!

Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 11:19 PM
magical: sorry, i meant to keep it on public, i just switched it to public
seijimon: thankyou

lamb Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 12:08 AM
i think third. lineless is tricky but you've done very well, it just seems a tad messy in some places. also the membrane on the wings looks really flat and untextured, i think you're lacking some shading there, especially since you've added the scales texture to the body, it looks a little odd next to how flat the membrane is

jillian Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 1:32 AM
Id like to see a third to see you refine your technique a little more, clean up some of the fuzziness and add a little more detail maybe?

Darkfire Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 1:38 AM
lamb: thanks for the crits, and yeah, i wasn't really sure how to go about the membrane
jillian: okay, sounds nice

walter reed Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 1:52 AM
to me this looks like it was meant to be a night scene but the colors on the dragon look a little bright to be in the dark (if it's a day scene ignore that critique)
the dragon is really cool though i like how you added definition to the muscular structure

Darkfire Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 5:14 AM
walter : your right, it is a night scene, and i do see what you mean, looks a bit to bright, thanks for the compliment and crits

Thera Nightwolf Tuesday, July 19th 2011, 9:51 PM
If I may; the stars seem to stop suddenly at the subjects. It's as if there's a line around them.

Other than that, a simple redline would fix this. I've noticed that the wing-fingers are a little smooshed together on the one spot, and the red spikes on his head look like jello. I don't know why. O_O

I'm not allowed to vote because I'm not accepted yet myself, but I wish you luck all the same!<3

[166104] Artist: Darkfire | Title: Tryout 1 flavor | Time: 1h 41m
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Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 9:53 AM
wow, sorry, this was ment to be full body....but i ended up with only half, sorry, i'll make sure my next tryout is full body
this is supposed to be someones OC enjoying a pomegrant (which i don't think i drew right) i hope she's holding it right, i've never eatin one, anyway, idk what the bg is supposed to be, it was just fun :3, i would really appriciate some critiques or redlines smiley
oh, and this was drawn by request, it's someone elses artic fox character who enjoys pomegranite, this was really fun to draw

(Edited on July 18, 2011, 9:54 am)

jillian Monday, July 18th 2011, 11:52 AM
Actually, youre only supposed to scoop out and eat the seeds of a pomegranate!
you actually have some solid basic coloring skills, and the body looks pretty good, although the arm and hand could use more refining. The face is really what bothers me, it seems to stick out too much. Her eyes, nose, and lips seem to be floating on her face, the shading and highlighting on her fur around them dont hint at any structure.

WAtching the animation, the initial arm and hand you had sketched looked a lot more solid than the one you have here.

I suggest looking at references more than I would suggest redlines, when someone else redlines your work, they are including their own inaccuracies, when you study real life you are seeing things exactly how they are.

And you should try a pomegranate sometime, theyre really good.

Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 6:25 PM
jilian: oh, lol thanks, i didn't know that, after i finish all my tryouts on this website i might as well change the fruit ;3
and i'll try shading more solidly in my next tryout, and take a look at a few refrences
, thankyou i appriciate the crits

jillian Monday, July 18th 2011, 6:53 PM
Yeah its kind of weird haha, if youve never eaten one or seen anyone eat one you wouldnt necessarily know that :V

something I didnt mention was that I like that you actually took fur length into account when you colored her, a lot of people dont really pay attention to that

Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 8:05 PM
i need to try one, oh, and thanks ;3
i'm not sure what i should draw for my next tryout..

(Edited on July 18, 2011, 8:20 pm)

Worm Monday, July 18th 2011, 9:13 PM
Jillian covered all the critiques I would have said haha.

Pomegranates are fun but they're hard to eat -- literally. The 'peel' is like a rock and you need a sharp knife to even get into the edible part.. and dont' wear nice clothes when eating 'cause the juice usually gets everywhere! They are super yum though :D I want a pomegranate now

Darkfire Monday, July 18th 2011, 9:53 PM
worm: really? sounds kind of like eating crab legs, only more messy i'm guessing, i really do need to try one, i shall bother my mom into buying me one

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